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I like this, this is good.

well, im not a big acrostic fan, but this was pretty good, 'specially if its your first poem. and i loved the theme, being the tree-hugging hippie that i am...

:O!

Next time, mention something about Nitrogen Oxide. Pleeeeeeease? That's poetry enough for the whole poem!

It was a good poem considering the format, you had some very good lines in there
The title was good too. I like it. Nice work

I didn't even know what acrostic means untill chevy mentioned it in context. I didn't notice. I like the pendulum image and the man in the moon line.

Save the earth!!!

yep, knowing i'm a parisite gives me a warm fuzzy feeling inside *she is presantly carted off to the funny farm*

have a lovely day
~blue~

If i interpreted the message in this poem correctly, i would have to agree. The earth's time is running out, and it's all thanks to human's, isn't it niced to know your a parasite?

~~Shadow~Knight~~

I haven't read/ written an acrostic poem since primary school, but i liked this one.
especialy the bit about the earth being a pendulem (is that how you spell it?) and where you say
'not where earth is but where it used to be'

Have a lovely day
~blue~

P.S i don't think the flow was interrupted by the form, but then again, i'm not sure what that actually means...

It was a little too 'Let's Save the Rainforest!' for me, but I thought it was pretty good, especially with the pendulum analogy. That was pretty cool.

I've never heard of the acrostic style...have to google it. See what I find.

personaly not one of my favorite types of poems...it was good for what it was though...

I liked it. Thinking of earth's time to be here as a pendulum was a neat illustration. I haven't read an acrostic in a long time and honestly can't remember the restrictons for them (I read/write more fiction than I do poetry). The only part I recommend changing is:

"Letting earth's pendulum swing
Letting earth's time run out"

Both great lines, but I would change one of the 'letting's to something else. Good job. ^_^

whatever thats supposed to mean...

it wasn't bad considering the restrictions placed on it but the flow was interrupted by the form

I guess you didn't read the part where it said it was acrostic then....

Yeah I didn't even notice it was acrostic until she mentioned it.

Well, I personally don't like acrostic because they're so restricting, however, you did very well with creating a very free and flowing poem. I really like it. However, when writing an acrostic, be sure you put emphases on the first letter of each line, such as puting them in bold or high lighted them.